Peer Review : 20310 문예지

Grade
According to the rubric above, what grade would you give this essay? Why?
This essay deserves a five. It follows the classical argument and displays an interesting unique perspective on a highly specialized topic.

ThesisWhat is the thesis?

  The Social Network Service must not be controlled by any means even if it is the government.

Is the thesis clear and debatable?
Yes.

If you (The reviewer) wrote this essay, how would you have written the thesis?
Same as her.

Classical Argument
Can you easily identify the 5 parts of the classical argument? If no, what parts are missing?
yes.

Does the introduction catch your attention? Does it comfortably lead to the thesis?
yes, i can concentrate the text. However, I think speed of development of introduction is a little bit fast.

Does the narration give all the necessary background information to understand the topic?
Yes, it gives the definition of SNS.

Does the confirmation adequately support the thesis?
yes.

Does the refutation and concession address a realistic counterpoint? Does it adequately dispute the counterpoint, or respond in a reasonable manner?
yes.

Does the conclusion summarize the article and address the larger significance of the thesis?
yes. I think the main point is same with the thesis.
Persuasion
When you started reading the essay, did you agree or disagree with the thesis?
I agree with the thesis.

When you finished the essay, did you agree or disagree with the thesis?
I agree with the thesis.
If your mind changed, why? What parts of the essay were persuasive?
I did not change my mind.


Research
Is the author using research effectively?
Yes

Is the research from appropriate sources?
Yes

Are the sources obvious?
Yes

Are the pieces of evidence relevant to the thesis or essay?
yes.